Wrote another piece!

[Electronic DF Member Posts:288 Threads:22 Reputation 12]

Choices

Hearing these voices,

All inside my mind.

Even in the end,

You'll regret your choices.

I'm here worried and lost,

Pondering and reminiscing.

About the choices I've made,

All the bad ones at a cost.

Losing grip on realism,

I've made a new world.

Based all on a fantasy,

Product of creationism.

Dark thoughts will shroud,

The deepest of emotion.

Leaving nothing but man,

Enveloped in a smoldering of cloud.

I feel like there's nothing I can do,

Starting to believe.

I've lost all rationalism,

My insanity is true.

Gone through this shit over and over,

Insanity is what defines me.

Suffering from irregularites,

Depression makes me go a little bit slower.

Hearing these voices,

All inside my mind.

Even in the end,

I regret my choices.


What do you think?
(HONESTY rules all)

[Tamaki 力 Posts:1,544 Threads:136 Reputation 207]

Lyrics are good.

[Electronic DF Member Posts:288 Threads:22 Reputation 12]

Lyrics are good.

Thanks bb, bit awkward I know. I don't expect much responses from my poetry haha.

[Weeaboo (欠 を 食べる (Ketsu wo taberu)) Posts:132 Threads:9 Reputation 46]

I don't know why, but every time someone posts lyrics and such, I keep getting this video pop up in my head: 

[Electronic DF Member Posts:288 Threads:22 Reputation 12]

I don't know why, but every time someone posts lyrics and such, I keep getting this video pop up in my head: 

Well, it's not a rap :p , it's poetry. I see where you're coming from. My poetry isn't meant for everyone. If you don't enjoy or like it not your taste lol.

[Weeaboo (欠 を 食べる (Ketsu wo taberu)) Posts:132 Threads:9 Reputation 46]

I don't know why, but every time someone posts lyrics and such, I keep getting this video pop up in my head: 

Well, it's not a rap :p , it's poetry. I see where you're coming from.

Lmao I know, but still.  :noh:

[Electronic DF Member Posts:288 Threads:22 Reputation 12]

I don't know why, but every time someone posts lyrics and such, I keep getting this video pop up in my head: 

Well, it's not a rap :p , it's poetry. I see where you're coming from.

Lmao I know, but still.  :noh:

As I edited my reply. If you don't like it, it isn't your taste but insinuating that I'm bad at it is insulting lol because I'm quite good at it.

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[Weeaboo (欠 を 食べる (Ketsu wo taberu)) Posts:132 Threads:9 Reputation 46]

I don't know why, but every time someone posts lyrics and such, I keep getting this video pop up in my head: 

Well, it's not a rap :p , it's poetry. I see where you're coming from.

Lmao I know, but still.  :noh:

As I edited my reply. If you don't like it, it isn't your taste but insinuating that I'm bad at it is insulting lol because I'm quite good at it.

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Hahaha wait wait wait, I didn't mean any insult or trying to imply that you're bad. 
I just saw the title and almost shed a tear, going all "Oh please, don't let the forum go in that direction" but was relieved when it was just a poem.
I can see why you'd think so, but I honestly didn't mean any disrespect, I'm sorry. Poems really aren't my thing though, been forced to study too many poems in school.
But it's better than 18 / 20 of the ones I've read. Quite alright lyrics, I just can't get myself to enjoy poems though.

[Electronic DF Member Posts:288 Threads:22 Reputation 12]

I don't know why, but every time someone posts lyrics and such, I keep getting this video pop up in my head: 

Well, it's not a rap :p , it's poetry. I see where you're coming from.

Lmao I know, but still.  :noh:

As I edited my reply. If you don't like it, it isn't your taste but insinuating that I'm bad at it is insulting lol because I'm quite good at it.

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Hahaha wait wait wait, I didn't mean any insult or trying to imply that you're bad. 
I just saw the title and almost shed a tear, going all "Oh please, don't let the forum go in that direction" but was relieved when it was just a poem.
I can see why you'd think so, but I honestly didn't mean any disrespect, I'm sorry. Poems really aren't my thing though, been forced to study too many poems in school.
But it's better than 18 / 20 of the ones I've read. Quite alright lyrics, I just can't get myself to enjoy poems though.

Ah don't worry, I didn't think you meant any disrespect <3 . Although a lot of people feel the same way you do about poetry. They've been told so much about it in school and it gets shoved down their throat and you can't appreciate the true nature of it.

[Nix Emerald Member Posts:1,778 Threads:174 Reputation 76]

Wow, that's pretty deep.